Talk:The Fall of Imoen Part 2

First of, Imoen...

WHOA!!!

This was one of the most interesting parts of your storyline that you've written so far! =D

I was pratically swept away!

Constant drama, no pause for the reader. I couldn't stop reading. xD

The only things that I can think of which could be better are a few spelling errors, and one little mistake:

"Elizabetha looks at Imoen and takes off the ropes and ties to a gryphon. She turns to Suzanne who looks horrified and scared."

Elizabetha was blind at this time, and didn't regain that single eye till much later after her fight with the Embrace. ;) Regardless, superb!

^_^

--Elizabetha 15:27, 11 August 2007 (UTC)

Ah thanks! =)

Yeah I feel that playing NWN2 really did help my story telling somewhat.

I've changed what you've pointed out and put a few extra lines in.

Imoenak

P.S just for some pointers, could you tell me what made this one better than others and if I should do more of the same with the other scripts / RPstories?

Thank you in advnace =)

...Woowwah. That is just...amazing. I was totally gripped, swept away, and affected by that story...you should be a writer. That was, again, a-m-a-z-i-n-g.

It seems that the more you stick around and get involved, the more radical-a-story you can make with more high-rise characters. I'll have to keep this in mind. Currently trying to think up a rather radical story for the Wiki. When I think who's gonna be in it, I'll ask the folksies individually. Good story, Imoenn! However, the punctuation is a little... lacklustre. But I take too much pride in my punctuation anyway, it was still great reading! Quite a fast-paced tale indeed, Imoenn! Hats off to you!

--Lombard